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Author Note

19th Jan 2019, 5:00 PM edit | delete



19th Jan 2019, 5:12 PM edit | delete | reply

I think Dylan found a new hobby....

19th Jan 2019, 5:42 PM edit | delete | reply

smashing buildings >> smashing skulls

19th Jan 2019, 5:46 PM edit | delete | reply

Quick note before I properly read this update- you might wanna change Jer’s first line as it still lines up with the old dialogue

19th Jan 2019, 5:49 PM edit | delete | reply

Hum I did actually change it, now he's referencing Dylan yelling 'You wanted me to think I was crazy'
Otherwise I guess I could change it to CALM YOUR FARM or something 🤔

19th Jan 2019, 5:55 PM edit | delete | reply

Hmm. It doesn’t seem to flow super well currently as “I WONT LET YOU WIN” was such an impactful line it sorta made me forget about the previous ones. Might just be me tho. That might be good? Either way it works 👌🏼

19th Jan 2019, 6:16 PM edit | delete | reply

maybe less of a problem if you're reading both pages at once and don't know the old line?
anyway, tried some other dialogue!

19th Jan 2019, 6:29 PM edit | delete | reply

That...is a very valid point, thank you for bearing with my unsolicited critique :’) I do dig this tho, it comes off as nice and bitter which is pretty fitting for someone who’s watching the guy who bashed his head in repeat the act on various inanimate objects. Also, the bottom half of this page is beautifully executed. That “NO” is exactly what I have been waiting for and I’m hyped

19th Jan 2019, 6:39 PM edit | delete | reply

Nah I'm always happy for dialogue problems to be pointed out! it's like having a free editor.

at last, it is time for suit jerry to emerge

19th Jan 2019, 9:47 PM edit | delete | reply

Smashing things!! :D

19th Jan 2019, 10:53 PM edit | delete | reply

he's having smashing time*

*joke 100% stolen from a commenter on Tapas

19th Jan 2019, 11:21 PM edit | delete | reply

For some reason I feel like Jeremy went through something while separate from Dylan, and he already knows what really happened and just wants to hear it from Dylan.

20th Jan 2019, 8:09 AM edit | delete | reply

Can’t get enough of this comic 😩👌

20th Jan 2019, 7:21 PM edit | delete | reply

Dang! I thought there is going to be a staircase and then an altar deep underground under that face :D
That would be too easy, would it not?

I was curious about what happened in the hospital seems rundown does not mean doors are smashed and screens broken but I see graffiti so probably just some groups hang out there? No mysterious fire or explosions? Heh.

20th Jan 2019, 8:17 PM edit | delete | reply

Nothing that radical from me I'm afraid!

i think the answer to that may be that I just don't really know at what rate buildings decay :') Ten years of abandonment + partial demolition = ??

20th Jan 2019, 10:18 PM edit | delete | reply

Looks like they're on the right track...

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